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Can someone check my grammar and punctuation please? Topic: The sister nightmare
June 16, 2019 / By Paget
Question: The silence of the empty church was a constant reminder that no matter how much I cried and prayed no one or nothing was going to come down from the heavens to save me from this constant nightmare I was now living in. Not even Grandmother who swore to me before she died that she’d be always there watching over me, even on her death bed she knew that from that day on I would be on my own. I watched my flickering candle at the front of the church there to remind me that I was hear to pray for those I love, dead and alive. No matter how hard I tried to focus on my prayers however I knew deep down nothing was going to save me, my sister or especially my mother. The question had always run through my mind; ‘did I actually believe in who I was praying to? Or was God just another fictional character there to put our minds at ease?’ the answer was most likely no. To tell the truth before that day I had never really paid much attention to religion or church, however at this point in my life God was now the only person or thing I could turn to. I dreaded the thought of returning home to my Mothers death bed and my sister’s constant cry for attention revolving around alcohol, drugs and cigarettes. Needless to say I would kill myself ten times over just to have the life of someone, anyone other than my own.
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Mandi Mandi | 1 day ago
The silence of the empty church was a constant reminder that no matter how much I cried and prayed, no one or nothing was going to come down from the heavens to save me from this constant nightmare I was now living in. Not even Grandmother, who swore to me before she died that she’d be always there watching over me, knew that from that day on, I would be on my own. I watched my flickering candle at the front of the church there to remind me that I was here to pray for those I love, dead and alive. No matter how hard I tried to focus on my prayers, I knew deep down nothing was going to save me, my sister or especially my mother. The question had always run through my mind; ‘did I actually believe in who I was praying to? Or was God just another fictional character there to put our minds at ease?’ the answer was most likely no. To tell the truth before that day I had never really paid much attention to religion or church. However at this point in my life, God was now the only person or thing I could turn to. I dreaded the thought of returning home to my mother's death bed and my sister’s constant cry for attention revolving around alcohol, drugs and cigarettes. Needless to say I would kill myself ten times over just to have the life of someone, anyone other than my own.
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Mandi Originally Answered: Can someone check my grammar and punctuation please?
The silence of the empty church was a constant reminder that no matter how much I cried and prayed, no one or nothing was going to come down from the heavens to save me from this constant nightmare I was now living in. Not even Grandmother, who swore to me before she died that she’d be always there watching over me, knew that from that day on, I would be on my own. I watched my flickering candle at the front of the church there to remind me that I was here to pray for those I love, dead and alive. No matter how hard I tried to focus on my prayers, I knew deep down nothing was going to save me, my sister or especially my mother. The question had always run through my mind; ‘did I actually believe in who I was praying to? Or was God just another fictional character there to put our minds at ease?’ the answer was most likely no. To tell the truth before that day I had never really paid much attention to religion or church. However at this point in my life, God was now the only person or thing I could turn to. I dreaded the thought of returning home to my mother's death bed and my sister’s constant cry for attention revolving around alcohol, drugs and cigarettes. Needless to say I would kill myself ten times over just to have the life of someone, anyone other than my own.

Kimbra Kimbra
The silence of the empty church was a constant reminder that no matter how much I cried and prayed, no one or nothing was going to come down from the heavens to save me from this constant nightmare I was now living in. Not even Grandmother, who swore to me before she died that she’d be always there watching over me, even on her death bed she knew that from that day on I would be on my own. I watched my flickering candle at the front of the church there to remind me that I was here to pray for those I love, dead and alive. No matter how hard I tried to focus on my prayers however I knew deep down nothing was going to save me, neither my sister or my mother especially. The question had always run through my mind; ‘did I actually believe in who I was praying to? Or was God just another fictional character there to put our minds at ease?’ The answer was most likely ‘no’. To tell the truth, before that day I had never really paid much attention to religion or church, however at this point in my life God was now the only person or thing I could turn to. I dreaded the thought of returning home to my Mothers death bed and my sister’s constant cry for attention revolving around alcohol, drugs and cigarettes. Needless to say, I would kill myself ten times over just to have the life of someone, anyone other than my own.
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Janet Janet
The content is very well thought out. When looking at the rhetorical triangle (logos, ethos, pathos), you def have pathos (emotionall attachment). But, you have several run-on sentences. When writing, remember to spice up your work by using different sentence structures. For example: The silence of the empty church was a constant reminder to me. No matter how often I cried or prayed, no one was going to come down from the Heavens to save me. The nightmare I was now living in was a constant reminder that I was on my own. My Grandmother swore she would always watch over me, but since she passed I often feel alone. Watching the flickering candle, placed at the head of the church, reminded me I was there to pray those I love, dead and alive. Trying as hard as I might, I could not focus on praying. My mind kept wondering. "Do I actually believe in who I am praying to?" "Is God just another fictional character created to put the minds of people at ease?" The answer was most likely no. Before that day, I never paid close attention to church or religion. In that point of my life, I felt as if God was the only thing I could turn to. I dreaded the thought of returning home to watch my mother lay on her death bed. I could barely handle my sister's constant cry for attention as she lashed out by using drugs, alcohol, and smoking cigarettes. I would kill myself ten times over just to have the life of someone other than my own. I hope this helped :)
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Erynn Erynn
could do with some commas to break up first sentence, its pretty long. and in the second after grandmother, in fact more commas throughout would be better. oh and Mothers needs an apostrophe as its belonging to her.
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Erynn Originally Answered: Punctuation help! and grammar?
I've changed some things, enjoy: “War is Peace, Freedom is Slavery, Ignorance is Strength,” (Orwell 3). This quote is useful in summarizing the party’s stance on war as a means of uniting the country. It has been said that when a group of people is faced with a common enemy, patriotism and nationalism become the forefront of a nation’s attitude. The United States, in particular, demonstrated that war can create strong national ties when the American people were able to overcome the Great Depression through their involvement in World War II. During times of war, most people will work towards a common goal never taking the time to pay attention to other things in life or around the world. The same issue is noticeable when reviewing what happened in 1984. The public became so preoccupied with war that they became blind to the problems that were taking place in their own back yard. Issues like the “Two Hate” and “Hate Week” swept the attention of the media and left people ignorant to much of the other things around the world. Here’s the “Additional Details”: The spread of Capitalism in the country swept through and was an overwhelming influence on both the party and on society. Having practically buried past events and brainwashed the general public through their propaganda, they were able to statically take over. Using the war as a means of uniting the people, the party was able to defeat their enemy, distract the seemingly ignorant people and remain a dominant force in society.

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