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Help me fix my run-on sentence?

Help me fix my run-on sentence? Topic: developing thesis statements
June 16, 2019 / By Alvy
Question: help me fix my run-on sentence please. this is a thesis statement which cannot be lengthened. i can't figure out how to reword it or whatnot in order to correct it. "Humans develop slower than other species in 1 year and because of this longer period of growth, we accomplish feats that other adult creatures cannot." thank you all
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Thrud Thrud | 6 days ago
Because humans develop slower than other species within one year, they are able to accomplish feats other adult creatures cannot. Or, if you are picky and do not want to start a sentence with "because" consider flipping the clauses: Humans are able to accomplish feats other adult creatures cannot because humans develop slower than other species within one year.
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Thrud Originally Answered: Help me fix my run-on sentence?
Because humans develop slower than other species within one year, they are able to accomplish feats other adult creatures cannot. Or, if you are picky and do not want to start a sentence with "because" consider flipping the clauses: Humans are able to accomplish feats other adult creatures cannot because humans develop slower than other species within one year.

Roseanne Roseanne
Humans develop slower than other species per year. It is because of this longer period of growth that we can accomplish feats that other adult creatures cannot. The longer in the second sentence is wrong though. In the first sentence you mention that we develop slower but not for longer. So the second sentence is referring to nothing. You cannot refer to something using new data.
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Myra Myra
Humans develop slower than other species in 1 year. We accomplish feats that other adult creatures cannot because of this longer period of growth.
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Lora Lora
Humans develop slower than other species in a year's time, hence, we are able to accomplish feats other adults creatures cannot attain.
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Kasandra Kasandra
In the case of relays and auctions whose profits improvement melanoma and equally grave illnesses, there's rarely a shortage of volunteers or benefactors. There is not often a shortage of volunteers or benefactors for relays and auctions whose profits benefit melanoma and other grave sicknesses.
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Kasandra Originally Answered: When to use "that" instead of "who" in a sentence - please help?
I confess to being annoyed when people write or say "that" to refer to a person, but the grammar sites and dictionaries I've checked, even the OED, say it's OK. So in your first sentence either conjunction would be OK, and so would "Friends you made...." But personally I hope you don't choose "that." Note that "whom" would be technically preferable to "who" since it's the direct object of "made," but that's a battle that was lost long ago; use whichever sounds more natural to you. In your second quote I'd strongly prefer "whom" (or "who") but "that" is acceptable too. I think the verb would more likely be "hasn't" in the U.S. and "haven't" in England, where corporate entities are treated as plural, but "haven't" works in the U.S. if you are specifically thinking of them as two individuals (with separate cellphones, perhaps?)..

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